Moriah Leila

Okay, evidently there is no pattern to your rhyme scheme, and when you do rhyme it feels very forced (i.e. me/thee) I would say you would do better to just ...

I have to agree with Kat, in that you brought a freshness to the genre of love poems. Except that you killed it with the "You drive me crazy" part. ...

I liked this poem because I could really relate to it. It is hard to determine who I am when all of my roles are removed. My only critique is ...

Good job on this piece. I too enjoyed the fact that you focused on the speaker's flaws instead of their strengths. And I liked that you regarded love as a ...

Ha ha, this was a very clever piece. I really liked that the poem was from the house's perspective. Very fresh. Although I am wondering how a house can own ...

While I thought you did a good job conveying the point you were trying to make, this poem lacked emotion. No one is going to connect to your work if ...

Yes I think this is greatly improved. It makes a lot more sense, and I think you have rectified the pattern/rhyme. My only critique at this point is your punctuation. ...

I have to agree with Mr. Knightley, this poem is wonderful! I love your description of the scars and the tears. Although at times I felt like you were trying ...

I have to disagree with everyone else, I think you forced the pattern and the rhyme. I think that might be the reason why it is difficult for us to ...

I get this poem, but to be brutally honest, I think it is extremely whiny. Oh poor me, no one cares about me! Instead of complaining, infuse this poem with ...

I really enjoyed this poem. It is so true! And it gave me a good laugh. My only critique is the last two lines: Because I am Tissue. Up until ...

I have to say that this is extremely well written and very moving. I think you catch the emotion behind such traumatising events very well. It is a tad long, ...

I'm not so sure about this poem, it read more like prose than actual poetry. Perhaps because it didn't flow quite like I expect poetry to. Also I wonder where ...

I'm having trouble logging onto the chat. When the window opens the picture is shifted all the way over to the right so that the login button isn't accessible. Not ...

This poem has good bone structure, but it needs some more meat on those bones. Nighttime is so much more than just what you can see and smell. I wish ...